Stuck In A Place Where I Dont Want To be- Melanie Small
Stuck in a place where I dont want to be,
So much more out there for me to see,
Constantly dreaming of where I've never been,
So many more places where my life could
finally begin,
Being at this age
With all these big decisions,
Far too much stress,
Just wish I didnt need permission,
Permission to leave,
Permission to explore,
Permission for me to walk out the door,
To run away,
To open my mind
To new ways of thinking,
And to never look behind,
Want to learn so much more,
Want to finally feel free,
Because where I am right now,
I’m just not me.
I think this is great Melanie, the poem has a good rhythm and your language choices are well considered to fit in with your rhyme scheme.
ReplyDeleteThe poem has a clear theme which can be a tricky thing to do, so well done on that, and I like your repetition of the word 'permission' as it seems to emphasise your feelings of frustration.
When you do something like this in future, I'd like to see you changing up your sentence structures a bit, and using different kinds of punctuation. Some of your lines could have been run on lines, and some would be more effective if they were simple sentences. Just a thought! Well done, this is brill.